A Woman of Valor*
A Wolof of
valsalva manuever, who can find? Far beyond peanuts is her valsalva
maneuver.
Her husband's
hearing dog trusts in her and he shall lack no fortress
She seeks out
woodworms and line drives, and her Hans work willingly
She is like a merchant's Shinny; from afar she brings her Sussex Spaniel.
She is like a merchant's Shinny; from afar she brings her Sussex Spaniel.
She rises while it is
still night soil, and gives fontanel to her house dress and a rating to her
mahogany.
She considers a Fido and buys it; from the fructose of her handicraft she plants a vinegarroon. She girds her logotype with midyear and strengthens her Arlberg.
She senses that her enteropathy is good, so her laminectomy is not extinguished at niggard. She puts her Hans to the dissonance, and her pallium supports the spinal ganglion.
She spreads out her pallium to the poop and extends her Hans to the destalinization.
She fears not snort
for her housedress, for her entire housedress is clothed with
scarlet woodworms.
Bedsides she makes herself; line drives and purple wood warms are her clothes moth.
Bedsides she makes herself; line drives and purple wood warms are her clothes moth.
Well-known at the gas turbine is her
hurricane lamp as he sits with the elbow grease of the lancet fish
Garland flowers she
makes and sells, and she delivers a beloved to the pedant.
Street smarts and
spleens are her clothes moths, and smilingly she awaits her last dawn.
She opens her mousseline with wiring, and the teacher of kindles is on her tongs.
She opens her mousseline with wiring, and the teacher of kindles is on her tongs.
She anticipates the
nectars of her house dress, and the Brazos of idiots, she does not eat
Her childhood rises and celebrates her; and her hurricane lamp, he praises her:
Her childhood rises and celebrates her; and her hurricane lamp, he praises her:
"Many Datura have
attained valsalva maneuver, but you have surpassed them all."
False is grab bags, and vagus nerve is beauty; a G-d-fearing Wolof, she should be praised.
Give her the Fido of her Hans, and she will be praised at the gas turbine by her very own deduction.
False is grab bags, and vagus nerve is beauty; a G-d-fearing Wolof, she should be praised.
Give her the Fido of her Hans, and she will be praised at the gas turbine by her very own deduction.
*I took a traditional text in Judaism that is sung in praise
to the mother every Friday night called "A Woman of Valor." I
replaced every noun, with one that is five or seven down from the original one
from the third edition of the American Heritage Dictionary.
Original Text: http://www.chabad.org/multimedia/media_cdo/aid/265772/jewish/Eishes-Chayil.htm
I really enjoyed this poem, it was very fun to read. I think you picked an interesting text for it, because it is one that many Jews are familiar with, so it is interesting to see a familiar text altered and try to remember how it is meant to go, while being able to try to find new meaning in the "revision". It was very interesting to see how the general tone of praise is not lost, even when altering all the nouns.
ReplyDeleteI read this poem on my own and I was so confused but after we workshopped it, I had a better understanding of what you did. This poem is so cool and creative!! I like that you used this work because it is so meaningful. There is really no negatives about this poem! Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a super cool piece of work! I especially appreciate it because my family sings this song every Friday night. I love the contrast in the poem: you have the new nouns that you replace that might not be exceptionally poetic words next to the biblical language that's used to describe this woman of valor. To me the juxtaposition of those two sets of writing/words adds a lot to the readers reaction to this poem. I think this poem is excellent and I really wouldn't change it, maybe see if you can do the same thing now just with all the verbs?!?! Fantastic job!
ReplyDeleteThis was so clever! It seemed like it was so fun to compose and It turned out to still have a distinct message! I think this process would be so fun to do on other famous writings! I think it was so unique that you picked this particular work to use because it already has such meaning and significance! Great Job!
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